Looking Carefully

Brushing against strangers
Friction and resistance
Creating cricket songs

Iron butterfly lands
Weighing down petals
That bend but don’t break

Fragile glass bones
Risk connection
Gently hold hands

Fleeting life
A short breath
Blink and die

Eyes search
Heart seeks
Hands clasp

Love
Tames
Fear

There is a form that is a Diminished Hexaverse which is defined as 5 stanzas with the first having 5 lines of 5 syllables and each following stanza having a reduced number of lines and syllables. Now I was willing to accept this as a valid form except hex is a Greek derived prefix indicting six not five! If it were properly named it would be a Diminished Pentaverse. This misnamed form has resulted in me attempting to write a Diminished Sexaverse since the Hexaverse has already been misappropriated. My version is a uniform 3 lines per stanza with only the number of syllables reduced in subsequent stanzas beginning with 6 syllables per line…

The accreditation visit is over. We can all in unison release a sigh of relief. We were examined, put under a microscope, and thoroughly picked apart. Dissected really. We all feel like the Thanksgiving turkey carcass that has had all the meat removed and then boiled for stock. All that remains are the throwaway parts. The celebration is underway – at least for a couple days. Then it is back to the grindstone to keep our noses sharp.

20 thoughts on “Looking Carefully

    1. We wear uniforms all the time. We just don’t always color coordinate but sometimes it happens accidentally. We just made sure we were “in harmony” on that day!! And we did survive!

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    1. Yes we survived the site visit. There were a couple tense moments but it was all good – even the criticisms were made with the idea to make us better. So we are making changes that will make us better in several areas!

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  1. I’m sorry the accreditation visit was so difficult! — and you will have a tough time when the “negatives only” report comes out — they won’t say how wonderful you are — just the exceptions! But you came through it well, and it’s time to celebrate! Have a great weekend!

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    1. They were very complimentary! They gushed over our staff and our SOPs and our facilities… they had 4 (yes only 4) things that needed attention and we’ve already addressed them. All is right with the world…

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      1. They really just want to assure students that you are doing what you say you are, institution-wide. They have to pick you apart to observe that, but I’m so happy to hear that you did so well. 4 exceptions is excellent, especially since you could address them all so quickly. Again, have a happy decompressing weekend!

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  2. I will be waiting with bated breath to hear all the details.! I hope you will call me soon. I loved your poem and your explanation of it too . I think you are right; however, that word “sex” is kind of a misleading name for this kind of pooem or am I missing something ?

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    1. Hehe! No the sexaverse is just more descriptive of starting with 6 syllables since hexaverse had already been (improperly) used… I will try to call you tomorrow if I can get a moment!

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  3. So glad you all survived “the visit”! Whew! πŸ™‚ Enjoy the celebration! And as you get back to the grindstone, think of the celebration and smile! πŸ™‚

    Love the style(s) of this poem…and how it flows! It has a lot of important “meat” and depth, and ends with wisdom that we all need to keep hanging on to!

    So many things you mentioned…”fragile glass bones”, “fleeting life”, “brushing against”, “weighing down”, etc…all can seem scary and daunting, but all are a part of life…and can reap great growth and strength!

    HUGS!!! πŸ™‚

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    1. Thanks for the positive comments re:the poem! I am acutely aware of the challenges that lead to growth (mostly spiritual and emotional) even though I am engaged in forcing intellectual growth in the unwilling…

      I take it you read this poem out loud? That is how it is meant to be done as it has all sorts of verbal elements…

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      1. Oh, BTW: Because my WP site is on “private”, I don’t think you get notification when I comment back to your comments on my blog posts.

        I always take the time to comment on all of the comments I recieve, so remember to check back and see. πŸ™‚

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