Looking at a Bad Scalp Condition

The warmer weather has loosened all the petals from the blooms on the trees. It is as if the trees all have a really bad case of dandruff. I can imagine them shaking their heads and then brushing the petals off their shoulders. As it is I end up with petals in my hair as I walk beneath the row of flowering plums. After the last rain, the sidewalk was covered in white petals…

The way the dandruff flies
With every shake it falls
White showers from the skies
Springtime’s many flaws

With every shake it falls
Drifting on the wind
Springtime’s many flaws
Dainty petals descend

Drifting on the wind
On my shoulders land
Dainty petals descend
Flakes brushed away by hand

On my shoulders land
Dislodged and scattered ‘round
Flakes brushed away by hand
End up on the ground

Dislodged and scattered around
A passing phase will change
End up on the ground
All the trees have mange

A passing phase will change
The way the dandruff flies
All the trees have mange
White showers from the skies

This is a Pantoum, a Malaysian poetry form, consisting of interlocking stanzas of 4 lines. The 2nd and 4th line of the beginning stanza become the 1st and 3rd lines of the next stanza. There are no limits to the number of stanzas. The poem can be completed with a single rhyming couplet or use the 1st and 3rd lines of the first stanza as the 2nd and 4th lines of the last stanza. The lines should rhyme (1st/3rd and 2nd/4th) but there is no specific meter. Some modern Pantoums do not use rhyme…

15 thoughts on “Looking at a Bad Scalp Condition

  1. Kept imagining the soft float of petals instead of the hard oak leaves we get in the spring. 🙂 Imagine could be slippery when wet though.

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    1. Yes they can be slippery but only if the wind doesn’t push them to the edges of the grass before the rain plasters them to the cement! But it isn’t that slippery and it makes for a dainty mosaic pattern on the sidewalk.

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  2. The large cottonwood tree in my backyard is just starting to shed. The ground may be white by June 10 which is when my grand-daughter and great-grand-daughter will be having their Open House here. They both will graduate from Warsaw High School June 8.

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    1. Wonderful that you are hosting the graduation open house! Congrats to the grads!! The cottonwood trees are death from allergies for Sparky. He is usually miserable for a couple of weeks – at least until all the fluff in the air is gone!

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  3. I like the pantoum, both reading it and writing it. When we lived in Hawaii the plumeria trees dropped their blossoms on the sidewalks and Krysten would pick them up and put them in a Ziploc bag whenever we took a walk. She cried when I explained to her that not all children lived where they could pick up beautiful flowers off the sidewalk. Your poem took me back a few decades!

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    1. We really need to go to Hawaii! I’d love to pick up flowers from the sidewalk! I can understand her sadness that other children didn’t have the beauty that she experienced! A strong sense of empathy at a young age. No wonder she is so good at her job!!

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  4. A master poet at work again, weaving her beautiful tapestry of words. Great imagination and analogy of the petals and the conditions of the scalp. Kudos Val!

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    1. Haha! Thanks for the gracious compliment it means much from you (a lauded and published poet). I’m pleased that this rings true on a medical level as well! I am always worried that my skewed perspective only appeals to my own personal sense of humor…

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