So CalmKate posted a little photo challenge on her blog to creat your own post about the photo above. I was struck by the waterfall of tears and the silouette of trees as lashes. Eyes are often windows to see within but they also function as mirrors. The fires that have raged and still rage both literally and figuratively in 2020 have made a gash in my psyche. A slash and burn kind of landscape, at least emotionally, is my experience so far.
The closer I look the more I see
My tears spill out before I blink
What I see makes my spirit sink
The closer I look the more I see
My tears spill out before I blink
Trees afire I watch them burn
Fox and deer to ash they turn
My tears spill out before I blink
Trees afire I watch them burn
I’m unable to stop the flames
I can’t remember their names
Trees afire I watch them burn
I’m unable to stop the flames
Destruction spreads and reigns
The grim reaper gathers grains
I’m unable to stop the flames
Destruction spreads and reigns
The earth is scorched and turned black
Death will never give them back
Destruction spreads and reigns
The earth is scorched and turned black
The closer I look the more I see
The earth cries out “just let me be”
The earth is scorched and turned black
The closer I look the more I see
My tears spill out before I blink
What I see makes my spirit sink
The closer I look the more I see
The above poem is a Catena Rondo. It consists of any number of 4 line stanzas having a rhyme scheme of AbbA where the first and last lines are identical. The Second line becomes the first and last lines in the next stanza and so on until the last stanza which is identical to the first stanza word for word. It has repetition and that gives it a chant like quality.
Your interpretation is well-suited to the poetry form. Very nice.
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Thanks Carrie! I was inspired. I don’t always participate in the photo challenges but this one grabbed me.
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A very fitting poem to go with the picture. And so perfectly descriptive of right now. Here is to a better week to all.
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Thank-you! The world is on fire (perhaps figuratively) now. I’m hoping that there will be some real change. We need need to change if we want a say on the world stage. No way can we condemn human rights violations of other countries when we our own house is a mess.
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Yes
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wow oh wow, that format really echoes your sentiment … powerful poem that matches the pic perfect! Thanks for participating Val
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Wow! Thanks Kate! I had wanted to try out this poettry form and the repetition seemed to hammer the point effectively. Thanks for a great photo!
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you certainly used it for maximum impact, kudos!
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Thanks Kate!
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I see someone that needs to take a shower and clean that crap out of their eyes. Maybe she should think about trimming her eyebrows once in a while.
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And I thought for a moment that you might have a poet’s heart….
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Unless they sell heart
at the local mart
I have what is clear
dry eye’s, not a tear.
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Hehe! Seems to be a thing (heartless). My BIL who is ret Army has a great deal of difficulty mustering up some sympathetic feelings. I think the military life changes people…
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Wonderful interpretation!
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Thanks so much for the kind words and the visit! I hope you come visit again soon!
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You are so welcome! Will surely do.
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Yay! I’m glad to hear it!!
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💙
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A very powerful poem and it fits perfectly to the photo as well as the form you used .
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Thanks tons Mich! I thought the form would work well and I’m glad for the confirmation!
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It worked so well Val❤❤❤
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Thanks!!
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I love how each stanza unfolds into the next, how the repeated lines are a sort of cocoon for the sentiment in the middle. Your word picture fits well with the Kate’s picture. The eye is definitely the center of both, our way of seeing the world and looking inward. The Catena Rondo is a new form to me, elements of cascade and pantoum coupled with rhyme. Nice!
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Thanks Joan. This was my first attempt. It was a little intricate at first but after I figured it out it flowed nicely. I’ve always liked forms that had some constraints – allows me to be able to focus for impact…
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Interesting. I think this is one of the lesser challenges to do. Again, I am busy with schoolwork but this does look like fun!
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Kate always has good challenges but I have trouble with timing so I don’t always participate but this one really caught my eye…
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I like it. You did a good job.
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Thanks Eve!
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You’re welcome. What is your first name?
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Val, but I’m mostly referred to as Muris or the mouse because that was my “online name” when I was working – to keep that thin veneer of anonymity. Now that I’m retired it isn’t as important. I’m not worried that management will use it against me. When I retired the contract (that we were all forced to sign) restricting what we could and couldn’t say on social media became null and void.
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Nice to meet you again, Val.
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Thanks. Good to meet you Cupcake~
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I prefer Cupcake.
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Check!
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You always make a small word look like the Niagara of emotions. The poem is lovely.
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Golly! I’m flattered Zakiah!! This form is a good one for little words and big emotions (compounded by repetition).
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a very melodic piece of writing, your words flow beautifully
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Thanks Gina! I’m tickled you liked it! It does sound good when read aloud…
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wow…
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Thanks for the wow!
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Thanks for the wow!
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Wonderful poem.
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Thanks Elizabeth! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Nice poem – I don’t know much about poem formats, but I enjoyed learning a bit about the Catena Rondo.
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Thank-you Sheryl. Sometimes knowing a little about the process makes the end result more satisfying – sort of like seeing the recipe and then the tasty result!
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I read the paper and other articles and email to my wife since she’s lost so much of her sight. You are absolutely correct. It sounds so melodic when read aloud. We both enjoyed it so much. Thanks for sharing. I like the Catena Rondo format. You are inspiring. BTW…I have mended socks because I liked them and wasn’t ready to give them up. With the loss of our mills in the mid 2000’s certain socks are no longer available. And I hate to shop. HA! I must leave…I have miles to go before I sleep. G’nite sweet daughter of my friend.
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Good morning Joe! I was taught to darn socks by my great grandmother. She used a light bulb to stretch the sock and I’ve used that trick ever since. We have become a “disposable society” where it is cheaper to just buy a new pair. They are nolonger teaching darning in school Home Ec. classes so many have no idea how it is done. Darn!
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The verse illuminates the phot, and vice versa. Being one who doesn’t cry often, but goes into flood mode when I do, this vision hits my heart.
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I’m tickled that this touched you! It is a serious topic in troubled times. Sometimes a good cry can wash away the confusion allowing us to see clearly.
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