Looking in the Window

So CalmKate posted a little photo challenge on her blog to creat your own post about the photo above. I was struck by the waterfall of tears and the silouette of trees as lashes. Eyes are often windows to see within but they also function as mirrors. The fires that have raged and still rage both literally and figuratively in 2020 have made a gash in my psyche. A slash and burn kind of landscape, at least emotionally, is my experience so far.

The closer I look the more I see
My tears spill out before I blink
What I see makes my spirit sink
The closer I look the more I see

My tears spill out before I blink
Trees afire I watch them burn
Fox and deer to ash they turn
My tears spill out before I blink

Trees afire I watch them burn
I’m unable to stop the flames
I can’t remember their names
Trees afire I watch them burn

I’m unable to stop the flames
Destruction spreads and reigns
The grim reaper gathers grains
I’m unable to stop the flames

Destruction spreads and reigns
The earth is scorched and turned black
Death will never give them back
Destruction spreads and reigns

The earth is scorched and turned black
The closer I look the more I see
The earth cries out “just let me be”
The earth is scorched and turned black

The closer I look the more I see
My tears spill out before I blink
What I see makes my spirit sink
The closer I look the more I see

The above poem is a Catena Rondo. It consists of any number of 4 line stanzas having a rhyme scheme of AbbA where the first and last lines are identical. The Second line becomes the first and last lines in the next stanza and so on until the last stanza which is identical to the first stanza word for word. It has repetition and that gives it a chant like quality.

49 thoughts on “Looking in the Window

    1. Thank-you! The world is on fire (perhaps figuratively) now. I’m hoping that there will be some real change. We need need to change if we want a say on the world stage. No way can we condemn human rights violations of other countries when we our own house is a mess.

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  1. I love how each stanza unfolds into the next, how the repeated lines are a sort of cocoon for the sentiment in the middle. Your word picture fits well with the Kate’s picture. The eye is definitely the center of both, our way of seeing the world and looking inward. The Catena Rondo is a new form to me, elements of cascade and pantoum coupled with rhyme. Nice!

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    1. Thanks Joan. This was my first attempt. It was a little intricate at first but after I figured it out it flowed nicely. I’ve always liked forms that had some constraints – allows me to be able to focus for impact…

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            1. Val, but I’m mostly referred to as Muris or the mouse because that was my “online name” when I was working – to keep that thin veneer of anonymity. Now that I’m retired it isn’t as important. I’m not worried that management will use it against me. When I retired the contract (that we were all forced to sign) restricting what we could and couldn’t say on social media became null and void.

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  2. I read the paper and other articles and email to my wife since she’s lost so much of her sight. You are absolutely correct. It sounds so melodic when read aloud. We both enjoyed it so much. Thanks for sharing. I like the Catena Rondo format. You are inspiring. BTW…I have mended socks because I liked them and wasn’t ready to give them up. With the loss of our mills in the mid 2000’s certain socks are no longer available. And I hate to shop. HA! I must leave…I have miles to go before I sleep. G’nite sweet daughter of my friend.

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    1. Good morning Joe! I was taught to darn socks by my great grandmother. She used a light bulb to stretch the sock and I’ve used that trick ever since. We have become a “disposable society” where it is cheaper to just buy a new pair. They are nolonger teaching darning in school Home Ec. classes so many have no idea how it is done. Darn!

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