Looking to Postpone

Humans have been at the top of the food chain for a very long time. However I do believe that was not always the case. At some point we were a snack for something bigger, faster, stronger and just maybe smarter.

The hare is born to be the prey
Runs from birth to full grown
Master of the getaway

The sun comes up to meet the day
Fox surveys the beans new sown
The hare is born to be the prey

Nibbles tender shoots today
Listens for the hungry moan
Master of the getaway

Twitch of ear instincts obey
Before the pounce the meal is flown
The hare is born to be the prey

Rustling grass, a pause to pray
Snapping teeth miss the bone
Master of the getaway

For a meal the fox would slay
Yet the bunny death will postpone
The hare is born to be the prey
Master of the getaway

The above is a villanelle. It is 19 lines long in 5 tercets (3 line stanza) and a single concluding quatrain (4 line stanza). This form is composed with only 2 rhyming sounds. The first and third lines of the 1st stanza alternate as the 3rd line in successive stanzas and a couplet in the last stanza. It sounds more complicated than it is.

47 thoughts on “Looking to Postpone

  1. Kind of like with many things…the stronger candidate wins and in the circle of life there are followers and those who piss us off. Sometimes those who piss us off have a point and it might be valid. We need to watch those details and not follow blindly all but determine carefully the circle of life.

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    1. Hi Cupcake. I’m not sure what your comment has to do with this poem. This was not a commentary or allusion to politics. There is no animosity between the fox and hare – just a instinctual imperative to eat/be eaten.

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      1. I was not speaking about politics. I was speaking about relative things: like job interviews or creative writing contests and even picking friends. Sorry, my bad for not making this clearer. I meant the circle of life…..Kome by a.

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    1. Thank you Michel! The fox must eat but not every hunt is successful. Considering the rapidity of procreation in the hare, I doubt the species is in danger of extinction! As for poetry competitions, I will take it under advisement.

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  2. I mentioned this in another blog: Life is not a circle, it is a trapezoid. It has way more sharp corners, change of directions, and confusion, but still ends up in the place it began…just like a circle. Circles are smooth. Life is anything but.

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    1. Thanks Martha! I’m pleased that you can see the beauty in the eternal struggle. The form is not very difficult – sort of like the gesture drawing. It is intimidating until you give it a try… You have a way with words so I bet you could own this form!!

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        1. Hehe! I fished out my water color pencils and discovered that all my brushes are at the ceramics studio! I’m making a trip there on Wed. so maybe I’ll have an apple or 2 to show for my effort…
          I’d love to read a poem or two from you.

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  3. The villanelle is one of my favorite forms. A friend in my poetry group had a knack for them and threw in enjambed rhymes that were so organic you barely noticed unless she emphasized them as she read them. Well done. The food chain is literal and metaphorical, the focus of much of the day’s news. Essential food workers, food deserts, not being able to afford food, long lines at food banks, the “bunnies” ever closer to being caught by those with a more sophisticated trap.

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    1. Everyone seems to read into this from their own perspective a meaning or implied intent. This was simply a poem. Seems the whole world is fixated on the political goings on in this country. Enjambment is one of those devices that does not come easily to me. I think that if you can master it, the sestina and the villanelle become much easier to produce.

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    1. Thanks so very much for the generous compliment! I’m thrilled that you enjoyed this poem. You are NOT a poetry dunce!!! One does not need to be a concert pianist to enjoy music nor a poet laureate to enjoy poems!

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  4. Simply delicious. You are so talented and bright. Thanks so much for the respite from politics. I get so caught up at times worrying about the world..aka mankind. Thinking of rabbits reminds me of a skit the Smothers brothers did. Dick said the world was becoming overpopulated. Tommy said he was doing his part. Dick asked how and Tommy said he stood behind a tree at Mr Jones (raised rabbits) and every 3 minutes he’d jump out and yell “Cut that out”…

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    1. Thanks Joe! Glad I could take your mind off the political landscape for a few minutes. The Smothers brothers were funny but knowing what I do, every 3 minutes is too long to be effective!! (Quick like a bunny isn’t just referring to running speed! hehe!)

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