Looking for Revenge

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You did me wrong
Claimed it was your right
But they say that revenge
Is best served ice cold
And that patience
Is a virtue that I have
And possession is 9/10 of the law
At least that’s what they say

I hear what they say
But they are so very wrong
Cautioning me not to take the law
Into my own hands even if I’m right
My heart burns as I have
An elaborate plan for revenge
But it will require patience
And a day that dawns cold

Hell is freezing it’s so cold
And I waited to have my say
But I’ve run out of patience
To get reparations for the wrong
Payment consists of revenge
Forget the law
I don’t forget the hurt you have
Inflicted – You had no right

I’m putting things to right
I hope you suffer the cold
Suffer like I have
I wonder what they’ll say
About breaking the law
I’ll wait with patience
Smiling as I relish the revenge
An eye for an eye can’t be wrong

A right codified as criminal by law
Turns hearts cold and destroys patience
I will have my righteous revenge
Even when they say it is damnably wrong

I really don’t think this one needs much explanation. This is the End of Summer scavenger hunt prompt #10 – Write an Octina on the topic of revenge. The Octina is a variation of the sestina with 4 stanzas of eight lines per stanza. The envoi is 4 lines that use the end words two per line. Like the sestina the same end words are repeated in each stanza according to a matrix. Because the order repeats after 4 stanzas there are only 4 instead of 8.

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    1. Thanks Punam! I am not a law breaker but in TV and movies it is often the theme that the protagonist is someone unjustly wronged and they seek “righteous” revenge. Although they break all the civil laws we still root for them as they get redress.

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  3. OH WOW – GOOD, BUT I HOPE IT WAS MOSTLY “POETIC JUSTICE”.
    If possession is 9/10 of the law
    it may be better to leave it raw
    because of one tenth more were given
    it may just could turn it into 9/11~!

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    1. Ha! I love the poetic response but the OCD in me must point out the flaw in your calculation! An additional tenth would make it 10/10 and thus one (and we all want to be whole)!!

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          1. ever sense I put my fingers in that food chopper One keeps hitting the wrong keys – at least that is what I blame on… The other excuse is that my Latin blood wants to spell it that way. But my main problem is hitting a CRLF when I am not finished talking yet~!!

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              1. It was rather serious. Long story I had just gotten back from finally taking Shirley, to the hospice and my mind was just not on what I was doing. We had used one of those chopper things that I had made her a “smoothy” with before we left, the only food she could take by then. So I washed it out and then took a towel to wipe out the inside. my mind in a blank, I had left it plugged in…and the switch is on the side where just grabbing the thing will turn it on…WHICH I DID~!!! yes it chopped the three middle fingers and I was alone far from the nearest doctor, bleeding very profusely, and also not much thinking straight… So I wrapped it in a towel and drove to the emergency center 30 miles away~! The ER was full and one of those “almost a doctor” sat me down in the hallway and sewed up those fingers, while gurneys click-clicked by,,,,,,my mother could not sew as well as he did~!!.. one of the fingers was split right down through the nail. BUT to look at it, you can not tell it was hurt, except two of the fingers on my left hand are now dead near the tips and also a bit stiff… Lot of explaining to tell you why I often hit the wrong keys on that hand, but what makes it worse it that “spell check then “fixes” the word turning into something I did not mean to write at all… I NEED TO COPY THIS FOR THE NEXT TIME I HAVE A MIS-SPELLED WORD…~!

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                1. SAM! That is a horrible story and experience! I’m very glad that your injury was not so severe that you severed the fingers. I hereby cut you all the slack for spelling errors in perpetuity!

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                  1. Oh wow a get out of spelling free pass, something I have needed all my life… I have no probems with such Creolized words as Tchoupitoulas, but have trouble with words like at, those , and we….

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                    1. I was in 2nd grade and we were supposed to have a spelling test (back when reading was taught by sight recognition of words) and I couldn’t remember how to spell “went”. In my mind (and sometime still) I want to spell it whent! And yes I missed that word on the test (though I blame my mother who taught me to read phonetically).

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                    2. Yes I have been deaf sense I was three, so just do not hear things as others do, and this has always made me a bad speller… I still think that cow should be spelled COWL~! Fortunately I can see those mistakes so double check my spelling, but sometime post something before I notice.. my main problem is that if spell check is on, it may say something completely different by the time I see it…

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                    3. Spell check has been a real problem for some people but my spell check just underlines words that it suspects are misspelled. I can them decide if I really meant to type murisopsis! A former coworker was deaf in one ear and had the same issues. She couldn’t spell at all and there were a couple words that really tripped her up – Depth, deaf, and Depp (as in the actor) they were all pronounced Depp! There were others but that one I remember since we had a very funny discussion…

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                    4. I remember being taken out into the hall by my second grade teacher for a meeting with the principal.. They kept asking me if i knew the word I had written in a very exited way.. To this day I do not know what it was but it must have been a dousy~!

                      I once visited a crew that was working for British American Oil company, When I opened their work maps that they had to send to the client each week I noticed that they had been miss spelling American in the name~!

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                    5. Hehe! Probably a word you didn’t know but they did – and it probably was a doozy! When we were getting a new director (back in 2017) I was the only one who could remember how to spell his name. No one asked me to double check the spelling before they sent the order for a name plate for his door… it got sent back so fast it made some people’s heads spin!!

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    1. I didn’t relish this one – mostly because it is dark. But that said the Octina was much easier than the sestina. With the reduced number of repeats for the words I feel that it is less “forced” than the sestina sometimes becomes… As for the country music vibe I’ll own that this is Another Somebody Done Somebody Wrong Song (poem)!

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        1. Exactly! We allow the emotion to flow onto the page and not act it out. We can mold it to become entertaining, shocking, sad, or inspiring and thus make it a mirror for the human condition – our condition. Then once in the light we can examine the circumstances, our reactions, and then grow. Though for many, as they have never learned to express themselves through written word, the counsellors become a necessity…

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    1. I tend to confuse the heck out of them – I return kindness and comply (sometimes maliciously) with their demands, keep a sunny disposition and mostly ignore them… Of course I also believe in cosmic justice (having seen it played out). And of course I’m patient and I have rope which is innocently left nearby. I do believe the saying, “give them enough rope and they will hang themselves”!

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    1. Thanks Michel! Revenge is mine says the Lord! I only fantasize of revenge and write from observations – not from experience… Writing it in poetry form is as close as I get!

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