Looking at the Onset

1 Golden
Earth dances with the sun, tilting and spinning. These two old lovers anticipate and execute intricate footwork. I am left to marvel and wonder at the choreographer. All the while, I enjoy the golden hour when nature glows.

2 Green
The geese gobble grass and paint the concrete green. A chlorophyll pigment in an abstract expression. They strut as proud artists while I question their motivation. Every day I watch the green fade as rains wash it away.

3 Orange
The fields are pregnant with produce and abundance. The orange bellies of squash and pumpkins rise. Soon there will be a birthing from field to porch. Offspring of summer sun and fall rains take an evil turn as they grin.

4 Red
The bonfire roars with heat and tongues of red. Swallowing all that is offered, ravenous for twigs and husks. My skin flushes red as I huddle close to escape the cold night. Turning away my nose is nipped red by night chill.

5 Brown
Tilting away from the sun, she dances in summer’s twilight. A striptease of leaves green and gold flung to the ground. Her body chaffed red in the wind as warmth fades to brown. I watch the world turn inward away from winter.

Edit! I was in such a rush to get this posted before I had to be at work that I completely forgot to link it to the We’ave written Weekly poetry prompt and to David’s blog at the Skeptic’s Kaddish. This week’s Poet of the Week, Sylvia Cognac, challenged us to write a Cadralor about anything related to Autumn that is important to you…

This is a Cadralor poem which is defined as a poem of 5, unrelated, numbered stanzaic images, each of which can stand alone as a poem, is fewer than 10 lines, and ideally constrains all stanzas to the same number of lines. Imagery is crucial to Cadralor – each stanza should be a whole, imagist poem, almost like a scene from a film, or a photograph. The fifth stanza pulls the unrelated stanzas together into a love poem. Which means that the fifth stanza illuminates a thread that runs obliquely through the unrelated stanzas and answers the compelling question: “For what do you yearn?” It is the poet’s discretion to decide how much contextual connection or linguistic connection will exist between the stanzas. The more unrelated in context, the sharper and riskier the poem. Ultimately, the more unrelated the stanzas, the more successful the poem will be as a Cadralor because they contain oblique connections that are illuminated by the fifth stanza. End punctuation between stanzas is also at the discretion of the poet.

50 thoughts on “Looking at the Onset

    1. Hehe! Britta I’m thrilled beyond reason that this one merited a “Wow”! If you must know I struggled with this form (that isn’t a form). I toyed with doing what others had done – writing it as a tanka or kimo or haiku… but in the end followed the example of using the prose poem as the basis.

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      1. I hadn’t heard of the form at all and took a rather liberal approach. I like the idea behind it, though. Will give it another go. I think your prose poems work extremely well. But I guess, that’s because you do prose poems extremely well!!!


        1. Hehe! Thanks Britta! The prose poem was a form that stymied me when I was first introduced to it. The definition of a prose poem left me scratching my head. I read examples. I played around with it. I finally got comfortable – I’m thrilled you think I do them so well! You made my day!!

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    1. Aw shucks! Thank-you so very much! I’m happy you liked it! I’ve been on the go and I’m attempting to go back and read everyone’s blogs to catch up!!! I will be visiting your blog soon (but first I have to run back to work for my last time-point)…

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    1. Michel! I have not been seeing many blue skies this autumn. We have had a very wet and dreary season. And since I live far far away from any oceans they do not figure into many of my poems… ❤


  1. The colors of Autumn. I could close my eyes and see them after I read this. I also look out my window and see them. I wonder if God is giving us all this color, to make up for the drabness that usually comes before the beauty of the snow?


    1. Gracia I think you are right, a little burst of joyous color before the monochrome of winter… I’m tickled that this poem helped you see autumn in your mind’s eye!


        1. I saw that after I replied to your comment. I do hope and pray that she is able to recover her strength and have at least as much mobility as she had before the fall… ❤


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